revise short paper

Hi, this paper was worked with you about three months ago. since this paper’s final score is 6/10, so I want revised it and put into my portfolio after improve it’s standard. based on experience of revised my major paper and detail following the requirement is nessesary. there are some personal major suggestions: 1. a very specific and clearly main claim comes out at the first paragraph, better at the end of first paragraph; since the topic os this short paper is Writing claims about literature so i think this part definitely important. 2. detailing quote, for example, when the character’s emotional change or action movement? remember this paper’s audience are already watch the movie, so we cannot just summarized but expend and deep it. (take the example about the quote we use at the major paper) 3. arguable opinions definitely gains bonus point.