revision plan

I would suggest using your stakeholder as a source itself, we know very little about the campaign, their goals and/or the beliefs. You do a good job of using other sources as evidence for my certain techniques appeal to certain emotions or actions. Also, adding some statistical information into your introduction would add value and credibility to your writing.

You made some good steps towards forming a strong argument in this text and there is potential for a good argument however you need to ensure you make your thesis known early and try to make it a little more specific. This will help your entire argument as you will have more direction and clarity throughout. Beyond this, there is a lot of grammatical problem throughout which interrupt the flow of your writing. Make sure to go through and edit carefully and pay attention to how you are starting s sentences and if it makes sense/flows well. Good luck and keep building off this.

You understood the idea of GMO’S and made steps towards analysising the stakeholder, their views and how they were portrayed through the images. I would suggest to go deeper into why the images are the way they are and what they appeal to.

Topic sentences and transitions clearly, explicitly, and consistently support the thesis and facilitate the logical progression of the argument

Your ideas for the essay were adequately communicated throughout the essay , your point of view was also consistent. Overall your style was decent but there were some grammatical issues.